[NicBritt]

There’s a bit before Stapleton starts painting and he says “we’ve discussed my palette” .. eh? Where is this? I don think I’ve missed it. Would be useful.

 

[NicBritt]

Re the ‘cut’

If her shirt is in sunlight then the light shown on the floor has to either be longer – to include more of her leg shadow and also part of shirt shadow. Or the girl’s shadow on the floor compressed to include the shirt. (However the latter wouldn’t work as then the sun would be coming from too high an angle to match the mans shadow)

the sun is low and pretty much directly behind the camera as far as I can tell, so I would extend the light on the floor behind the girl.

[NicBritt]

Looking again: I think the values of all the sunlight areas need to be checked against each other. They are not, to me, reading bright enough or the same value.

best

Nic

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Hi Wouter,

 

I love your images – thought I’d just offer a little bit of critique from the perspective of a cinematographer as I think you are questioning your lighting.

The second image – the slash of hot light on the girl’s shirt is nice but there is no corresponding shadow: the ‘cut’ ends on her legs, but her shirt is still in light. This leads to an uncanny feel. I like the checker boarding of her silhouette against the light window: but perhaps it doesn’t allow the emotion of the girl and thereby the scene to be read as quickly. Plus the ‘heat’ of the slash perhaps draws attention a little away from the face? (Not that I mind this particularly) in fact I rather like the sense of ambiguity.

This could be mitigated by increasing the value of the guy’s trousers in light – there is not much contrast shift between light and shadow compared to the girl’s light and shadow. Perhaps look at this.?

just some rambled thoughts: typed with thumbs.

all the best

Nic

 

[NicBritt]

I’m a Cinematograper in another (pre-Coronavirus life) 😂 Hope the advice helps.

[NicBritt]

Ah in that case, the light in back room should be pools of light and dark maybe? It’s very even and seems to come from the ceiling with gives the impression of a single big light source.

[NicBritt]

wow! I love it. i don’t know that I have much to add of use… I might make the top half of the smoke disappear a little more into the darkness to emphasize catching the light. Also there appears to be a colour temperature difference between the two rooms – one daylight, one night time? perhaps this was intentional?

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Hi Annie, nice! I like the composition too, and also think the colours are interesting. For my 2 cents: i think the hair is missing something too and i think its light and shadow modelling – it seems to be mostly ‘local’ colour – ie. not following the window light (i wouldve expected the hair nearer the window to be lighter and shadow side darker. perhaps the far edge of the forehead is  little hard – perhaps it could be softened??  I also am not sure that the the values in the shadow (her left eye)  side eye socket are quite right: perhaps the socket and highlight darker?

but really i’m impressed as i don’t have much luck with digital. what software are you using? ive tried procreate but it always ends up a little cartoony or ‘hard’ edged.

[NicBritt]

Hi Annie, thanks for your critique -its really interesting I hadn’t noticed the almost face in that negative space! shows the value of having other opinions and eyes! i’ll have a think about what i could do about that space, I originally left the ‘raw’ wood surface showing by designbut perhaps i could add a background and darken the value of this area?

 

[NicBritt]

Wow striking portrait. 🙃 I think that perhaps her right eye is a little big (it’s the furthest eye from us) and both eyes a little big in general. But obviously this is just my opinion and I can’t speak to likeness. Perhaps it’s correct.

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thanks that good to know! looking at the photo now, the eyes are quite contrasty (more than elsewhere) – I would remove some contrast from the cheek lines at the sides of the mouth slightly and darken the top lip and shadow line of the mouth. Perhaps even soften the contrast beneath the nose ever so slightly. OR it could be case of increasing contrast everywhere?? but I think definitely focus on the lips. cheers

 

[NicBritt]

Thanks for your critique – yeah they’re supposed to be abstracted faces. the merge with the tattoos – they both exist/don’t exist. supposed to be visual representations of innervoices. i didnt want to make them “obvious” but to reward a more careful examination of the painting. BUT I think maybe the right one in particular disrupts the reading of the form of the arm and could benefit from being more subtle?? Id love to hear what other people think too

 

[NicBritt]

Nice portrait! for me i think the portrait could do with more contrast to make it “pop” a little more – and provide more definition. but this could just be the photo!

[NicBritt]

Lovely work. A real sense of motion and expressive gesture.

my only critique – I have a little difficulty reading picture 3. The forearm seems to bend in an unnatural position to the hand. Perhaps check again the cross contour marks. But really; great work.

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