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November 7, 2020 at 9:54 am #893292
It’s been a while since my last portrait, but the proportions on this one came better than most of my previous ones, so I would really like to get some insights on any possible improvements for this
- This topic was modified 3 years, 12 months ago by André Girão Tauffer.
- This topic was modified 3 years, 12 months ago by Jonas Pilau.
November 7, 2020 at 9:57 am #893294November 7, 2020 at 12:27 pm #893522Hi Andre
I like your portrait its expressive moody And draws the viewer in . In terms of critique there may be minor technical tweaks needed .some paint Mark’s/shading are misleading to gesture /form also the right eyeglass may be slightly large ,something there anyway also is mouth on right axis overall I would say a lovely emotionally exciting portrait great use of colour just needing slight tweaks which is so much better than empty technical perfection .Sorry I can’t be more specific I lack specific formal training in portraits
Tim
November 9, 2020 at 3:31 am #899371Thanks Tim! I’ll keep an eye out for the misleading paint marks/shadding, it would be great if you could point me to any specific mark or shadding you think is misleading. You’re right about the glasses, the one over the left eye should actually be bigger. Idk about the mouth in the right axis, I actually do struggle a lot with mouth drawing overall, my plan is to take a course here on portrait and head anatomy next, would be great to get a suggestion if someone knows of a good head anatomy to look at.
Thank you for the compliments and I’ll keep the critics in mind 🙏🏼
November 9, 2020 at 8:22 am #899627Nice work, like the cool ,well balanced colours.I think some of the forms ,like supra orbital ridges, forehead ,quite well depicted.
What catches my attention…is that on the left side of forehead, in the shadowarea, colour looks bit muddled.Also, just behind the lower rim of right glass and in right side of lower neck,the shadow areas appear bit misplaced and unnecessarily draws attention of the viewers.
Hope to see more nice works.
November 17, 2020 at 2:40 pm #927371Thank you srsanyal for pointing out the misplaced shadows. This does in fact feel misplaced, maybe I’ll fix it later on. Also the muddled colors in the shadow part of the forehead. There I’ll admit I didn’t care to work much on hahaha, and I’m not certain yet that I want that part to be more defined then it is
Thanks again for taking the time, much appreciated!
November 19, 2020 at 5:00 pm #931730Good day Andre! I’m enjoying what you are doing. I’m a student and learning to hone my eye. I can identify you are using soft edges to help areas recede and sharper more defined edges to attract the viewers eyes. That is nice. Specifically, soft on the right side (as the viewer) of the hair and harder more defined and dramatic on the left side of the portrait. The light is interesting, I’m not sure if I’ve identified it correctly. Maybe two light sources one from slightly below and one coming from the left side of the image…or maybe just one from lower left?? Which ever it is interesting and adds a certain mood to the image. (Reminds me of ‘The The’ album cover back in the day!!) The left nostril looks good and solid right proportions however I view the right nostril appears to be absent it doesn’t feel solid to me. Possibly less defined because of the stronger light source there?? I notice the eye glasses are disproportionate and not symmetrical. Technically as the glasses recede into the picture they should become slightly smaller tho it seems you may have over emphasized that here. These are the only areas that to my eye seem to need some possible adjustment. All in all tho it seems you are doing well and on a good track with your art. Nice.
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